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FEEDBACK NEEDED: Uriel's Wings Version 2 The forbidden tree was rotting and dying, tainting everything around it with its roots. The ground blackened, shrubs and mosses shriveled and curled onto themselves. Fruit became poisonous and trunks fell away into the dust. The animals that couldn't crawl or fly over the walls that boxed in the garden all lay down and died slow and agonizing deaths. I let all pass beyond, but let none enter, as I was commanded. I was to guard and protect, but not to intervene or do anything to save those inside. I was only to leave when the place that would one day be revered under the name of Eden disappeared and only a pit of sad memories remained.FEEDBACK NEEDED: Uriel's Wings Version 2 by ~ImmortalBond
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FEEDBACK NEEDED: Immortal Flame Jemiadiah "Spanky" Jones had run form commitment all his life. He dropped out of school, never was willing to hold down a job, and had never stayed in one place for too long. The only thing he stuck with was his old Cherokee Jeep he'd nicknamed Miles, because that's all it was good for. Spanky traveled all around the country, only stopping to rest and find quick ways to earn some extra cash. He came and went as he pleased, and that's how he liked it. He relished his freedom like it was a romantic dream, his being a lone drifter.FEEDBACK NEEDED: Immortal Flame by ~ImmortalBond
He had deep crinkles in his sun baked skin, carved into his face, even his arms. Sun spots were scattered all ov
I'm trying to get back into writing again and was wanting some feed back on my most recent stuff. Have I gotten rusty or improved? Should I continue to write the fantasy or stick to the poems? Is there any types of literature you recommend I touch on or is what I'm doing good enough? I'd love to get some feed back from you talented writers ^^ | More Journal Entries |
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